Rosemary Means Remembrance
Rosemary, I feel you slipping away
Pray ,do not desert me.This solitude
Is terrifying .And to confront each moment,
I ask only,that you continue to haunt me.
You are the dead rose whose smell,
Though faint, is never lost.The
Withered ,yet , enduring petal that
Faithfully lies ,between two yellow,
Frayed, pages filled with memories.
Unfazed are you by the inconstancy
Of fading ink , the words that slowly
You watch die,You continue to echo.
For your stain is etched more permanently.
And it tells of a love that you symbolized
And surely ,he once felt for me.
Something I wrote on the spur of the moment. Feel free to tell me if you think it's crappy.
Wednesday, March 30, 2005
Remembrance
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12 comments:
this poem...dunno why, creates a stirring deep down...great stuff.....Naveen
this stuff is damn good. try to better it next time...love ur work..up the irons!!!
pseud da pot.... you should put up more poetry....
Hmmm...Does the poem have a story?
Sorry if this comes as a dampener after all those encouraging comments...I am no poetry expert and dont earn my living being snobbish to bloggers...Just speaking my mind here. Poetry needs to be a little more...well...un-prose-ish. To be truly beautiful poetry needs to have many interpretations and many layers. Yours was a good effort, but failed on both counts...
If its any consolation some of your earlier stuff is worth a good read...
hey.. u know wat!!! i really like this one, but the effect was better when u read it out to me!!!
To all those sweet enough to say you liked this...Thanks!!!
To Anon...Well , I guess you are right about it being prose-ish...Only , whoever said I was trying to write a poem???
Is something a poem , just because it is written in 3 separate blocks of four , five and six lines each?? Obviously not.. and I claim no such thing!!!
Like I said at the end of the post..it's just 'something' I wrote on the spur of the moment...
And thanks for trying to console me but really ,need'nt have taken the trouble!!!!
A poem it sure ain't,
Stirring, it sure is.
looking fwd to more of the "spur of the moment" stuff.
First - I am the same anon who commented earlier...trust me the intro is necessary otherwise how do u distinguish one anon from another?? Isnt it a bit like trying to distinguish infinity and infinity+1..
Guess u should be a lawyer, coz u present a loophole - tht u never called it a poem. But in my defence look at all the comments u got...They certainly commented thinking it was intended to be one...
Anon:
Thanks for the introduction and the math analogy..lol
I could distinguish b/w anons if u left some kind of a name..lol
About my being a lawyer..Yup! I''d probably make a good one...
First, it was'nt a loophole that i presented , just a fact!!! ...Can't help it if u mistook something , for something else...and then criticised it for not being true to the nature of what you thought it was and what it really was not!!! lol...(i'm actually enjoying this..)
And regarding your defense...I dont think it holds. Just 'cos other bloggers have made the same mistake , does'nt make yours any less of one!!
lol...and anon..Don't u just love a friendly debate??
Eeehaaw...debate!!! Wonderful here I come...
Ahem...was that prose??? Plz dont tell me u put all that expecting it to be read as prose. Spur of the moment or not...
Suppose I hadnt come in and ruined your party...would u have told ur frnds..."thnks!!! but no thanks. You have appreciated my poetry. But it never was a poem..."
O well...if u reply to this saying - yes I would have, then well I have no case to plead.
Ciao...
The previous anon...
Lol...Well,let's see...I will not call it prose , nor will I call it poetry.Let's just say it was some random thoughts that occurred to me , in exactly the form in which I put them down. That's all!
And No..I would have said nothing about what I intended it to be , unless , someone came along and presumed that it was something that I knew pretty well myself it was not and criticised it!
Also, if say, some XYZ , read it and thought it was poetic , I'd take it as a compliment because sure ,I did'nt intend it be that way...But sometimes things turn out to be better (or not, is what u say, I suppose) than you expected. Or maybe they see something in it that both you and I did'nt!!!
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