Wednesday, June 03, 2009

A Poem (And A Disclaimer)

This is one of the few things I've managed to write in recent times (nearly a year). And apparently I seem to have lost some of my confidence in the meanwhile because I am terribly unsure of whether this is worthy for anyone else's eyes. But, I will take a chance and post it anyway. Nothing ventured, nothing gained, they say.

I couldn't decide what to call it, yet. So for now, it remains untitled.

P.S : If it's awful, do be kind.

Here goes :


My beloved is brown.
Not a weak cafe-au-lait brown.
Brown-er.
Like the ripe, gooey tamarind flesh
that spills out of heavy, fallen pods
in the summertime.
A manly brown.

She is fairer, they said of me charitably.
(Just as it ought to be), by more than a shade or two.
Yet, I suspect, only barely enough for them to approve.
For mine is a warm shade.
Like the strong, south-indian, filter coffee
that swirled silkily in silver tumblers
on that morning we were married.

But it was only last night, in a loving moment,
when he held my hands tenderly in his,
and then later our fingers intertwined,
in a crisscrossing of light and shade,
that We first noticed this.
And laughed.

Now, he amuses himself by saying
I am the exact hue of his favourite brew.

14 comments:

  1. potato3.6.09

    yaay! someone finally got it right. the disclaimer comes before the disclaimed abt.

    please register at our site so that we can send you a couple of ipods and a trip to hawaii.

    not bad, we say, for a year's gap

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  2. Ha ha ha ha.. My favourite and most faithful reader, did you actually read several versions of the poem ?

    Yeah, well, Pfff! It was a very long and frustrating night! And I just couldn't seem to get it right. Everytime I thought I was satisfied and posted it, I found something new that was niggling. So back to the drawing board, I went.

    I am rusty and have atrophied. So even the 'not bad' shall be accepted gracefully. :)

    And what website! Sheesh! For the gazillionth time.. when will I get to read your stuff!

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  3. Lovely.

    And it can only get better if you keep writing.

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  4. its lovely lady...do not worry so!!

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  5. It's really a good one - the simplicity, the feel, the expression... it's all too good. I especially liked the comparisons with tamarind and coffee etc. (coz of the beautiful and naturally flowing 'roopak' alankaar)

    keep writing more and more frequently :)

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  6. @ Meeru : Thank you.. But I have to say I'm surprised you still read :P

    @ Sid : Thank you also. But Sheesh! me thinks you credit me with too much. Because I have no clue what 'alankaar' is and any flowing 'roopak' is entirely incidental. :)

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  7. Very nice. Sounds contemporary and flows well into the last 2 lines. Why don't you publish on poetry.com? Its extremely motivating to see your stuff in print even if its online :). Write more!

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  8. "exact hue of my favorite brew" but awesome :)!! how could you have possibly doubted this?

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  9. @ Madhumita : I don't think I'm ready to send it to a poetry site or anything.. Maybe in sometime, if I get better, perhaps. But thanks for the encouragement, it is much appreciated!

    @ Madhuri : Ha ha ha.. I have no clue at which point that popped into my head... but once it did, I just had to have it in the poem even if it did change the tone and give the whole thing a rather comic twist!

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  10. This poem has inspired me to break my poetry-writing hiatus.. truly fantastic.
    i think you should title it 'my favourite brew' :)

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  12. This is why I'm glad you're writing again.

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